22 - Elevator Pitch No. 3
There was no additional feedback given since the last elevator pitch. I simply tried to edit and better express the ideas I've had for the previous two pitches.
The phrasing has certainly improved from the first time I recorded the pitch. I maintained the background from the last video which I think was better than the original.
Hello Ana,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the tone of your elevator pitch and the use of your hands to help emphasize your words. The speed of your elevator pitch was very good too, because it wasn’t too fast or too slow. Your description about each part of your product for the plants and the benefits was very detailed. I took another look at your previous elevator pitches and you have improved a lot. In your first elevator pitch, the camera was a bit shaky and you were a bit too close to the camera, however you were able to fix that in the following elevator pitches. Without feedback it can be a bit hard to know what to work on, but you still found of way to make your elevator pitch better than the previous ones. Also, the background of your video works well with your pitch. Keep up the good work!
Hello Ana,
ReplyDeleteI think that not only did you do a very good job with this elevator pitch, but it really shows how you took the time to see the comments as well as re-visit your previous elevator pitches and were committed to releasing an overall better product. The stability of your camera was fine as well as your tone and hand movement. You also changed the pitch itself and made it better by using better word choice and sentence structure. Good job!